A Poem

In my blogs I have mentioned 2 poems I had written.   Some of you have asked to see them.  
They are both still in draft! 
They are both about our soldiers facing a firing squad!
They are both unfinished, but I would appreciate your comments as to what you think about them, and whther they have any potential.
Here is the second one I wrote (first not yet published here!)

Innocence

Bang you're dead,
the children said
As they played their innocent game
Is this the truth
Of forgotten youth
Or the contrast of glory and shame

Bang, you're dead
It's as simple as that
The ending will soon begin
Before you go
I want you to know
The horror of the battle you're in

Bang you're dead
It's as easy as that
When you've done it many times before
Be a good chap
And give us a clap
If you quickly hit the floor.

Bang you're dead
It's as quick as that
If you won't wriggle about
Don't give us a quip
And it's still upper lip
And then it's over and out,

Bang, you're dead
It's as painless as that
If you admit what you have done is wrong
No moan or complaint
I know you're no saint
At your end I might sing you a song

Bang you are dead
Now where's your God
He's hidden away in the sky
Ever present, they say
Not far far away
Don't you ever want to question why?

Bang you're dead
Put on the hood
I don't want to see your face
It's been good to know
And a share a hello
But it's time to bring on the next case

Bang you're dead
And now that's a fact
I won't see you any more
Guilty or not
It won’t matter a jot
That's the true cost of war!

Bang you're dead,
the sergeant said
As they played their futile game
This is the truth
Of forgotten youth
Not the contrast of glory and shame